[C] untitled...

[flameheart]

The thing i do and the things i say
To keep the thought of you far away
Like smiling though im in deep pain
Cause you¡¯re my sunshine in my world of rain

unfinished, untitled... i wrote it awhile back. COPYRIGHT *gets defensive* although "unfinished" its complete, cause im not gonna write anymore (im like that) theres nothing else. it was for...iono, i had it saved... i WAS gonna post on my xanga... but then... *trails off*

[Snowstep]

Readability: 8/10
Um.... the rhyme was cute but the rythm was a bit off. XP at least that's what i thought when i tried to read it out loud! (oh no mr mugford!)

Originality: 9/10
I don't think i've read such a.... short and... um..... interesting poem like this! LOL the only thing is, i've seen something like the 2nd or 4th lines. aaaaannnnnnddddd i'm just being nice! LOL jk i know u were just totally bored!

Overall: 85%
meh, it's something to read. SO CLOSE TO AN A!!!!!!!!!