[C] Only Memories

[Snowstep]

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Only Memories

I watch
As you meet me by the river.
Your pelt shining silver,
Brighter than the moon.

We touch noses
As we hide in a bush.
I look into your dark blue eyes
Shining like a clear pool,

Reflecting our love.

Why is this so wrong?
I hate always having to hide.
Why can't we live together?
It's against the warrior code.

I press my grey pelt
Against your lighter one,
And purred with happiness
Just by being with you.

Dear Silverstream...

Why did you have to go?
You know I wanted you with me.
Now what can I do?
With you gone to somewhere

That I can't bring you back?

Take me with you
To the ranks of StarClan.
I can't live with this emptiness
You left in my heart.

I miss you,
My dear Silverstream,
With our pelts pressed together,
With our hearts connected.

I loved you.


- Snowstep

[Autumnstorm]

Readability: 9/10
It was easy to read: I didn't get lost or confused, but sometimes the lines didn't flow quite right.

Originality: 9/10
Pretty original, considering there have been many things written about Graystripe and Silverstream.

Overall: 90%
Great job! It was a deep, beautiful poem. The only thing you need to work on is how well it flows. ;D