[C] xx.You Are My Angel and My Demon.xx

[mysteryfaith]

It felt so wrong to love you.
Well, I suppose love's just that.
It feels wrong in some way -
The rules were made to be broken.
Yet I know of no rules, no boundaries
For I am the lion that prowls the thunder,
And I want you as my lioness
But you are the whisper of heather in the wind
My heart yearns for you as it does for trust
My family restricts me from you
But most these unspoken rules
Go on forever?
Whilst I long for your touch
My heart still beats
Whilst I yearn for your voice
My pulse still ripples
Whilst I wait for your sound
My eyes still watch
They tell me this
Tell me it's all a lie
That you will leave me
But you are my heather
And I am your lion
And I will protect your soul forever
Whether we are together, strong
Or apart, weaker
For the better times
When prey is flowing
And for the worse
When it hides
I will be by your side
No matter what they say
But will you be true to me?
Can I trust you with my love?
Should I snatch it away,
Save it for someone they reccomend?
I know no one like you
But I feel condemned by loyalty
Into a future of rabid unsettlement
Please save me
Love me or leave me
Either way I will not drown
In sorrow or confusion
In regret or anger
So please save me
My angel or my demon...

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[Lightningstar]

I like it a lot! ^^ I'll do a formal review later... I'm tired as of now. But great job! =)

[mysteryfaith]

Thanks! ^^ I didn't really base it on any WC characters, only that I knew it is WC-based rather openly, meaning it could resemble LionxHeather or LeafxCrow (with Leaf/Lion as the speaker.)

[Snowstep]

Readability: 10/10
Nice flow, and no mistakes that I caught.

Originality: 10/10
Although the "love poem" thing isn't original, but everything else is! It's new how you wrote continuous lines without stanza breaks, like a flow of emotion.

Overall: 100%
Very sweet and touching poem. ^^